Thriller

Chapter 11: CLOTH OF DUST

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When the harmattan winds stop coming, that's when we'll know the spirits have abandoned us.

Mirabel

Mirabel

UNSEEN

Afripad

When the harmattan winds stop coming, that's when we'll know the spirits have abandoned us.

Mirabel

Mirabel

UNSEEN

Afripad

When the harmattan winds stop coming, that's when we'll know the spirits have abandoned us.

Mirabel

Mirabel

UNSEEN

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The inner quarters did not feel like the rest of the compound.

It was quieter, not because it lacked life, but because everything inside seemed controlled down to its breath. The walls were smoother here, the walkways more carefully kept. Even the air felt different, as though it had been trained not to linger too long in one place.

Abena moved through it with a group of selected women.

Their clothes were the same rough sack cloth they had always worn, tied at the waist, hanging loosely over their bodies, frayed at the edges from constant washing and wear. The fabric scratched slightly against skin whenever they moved, absorbing sweat during the day and holding the cold at night. No one here wore anything softer.

That was deliberate.

One of the older women walking ahead of her adjusted her cloth as they passed a carved pillar.

“Do not look around too much,” she said without turning.

Abena replied, “I am not looking around.”

The woman gave a short sound, almost a laugh.

“Then you are doing it well.”

They stopped at a wide wooden door.

A guard stood beside it, his posture straight, eyes alert.

“Inside,” he said.

The women entered.

The room beyond was not empty.

Mats were arranged neatly along the floor, and a large basin of water sat in one corner. Shelves lined one side, holding folded cloths, oil containers, and small carved objects used for preparation before service.

This was not a living space.

It was a place of waiting.

The older woman clapped her hands once.

“Sit,” she instructed.

Everyone obeyed.

Abena lowered herself onto a mat near the middle, placing her hands on her knees. Around her, the other women adjusted themselves into positions of quiet expectation. No one spoke immediately.

After a moment, the older woman began again.

“You are not here to ask questions,” she said. “You are here to follow instruction.”

A younger woman beside Abena shifted slightly.

“Will we see him tonight?” she asked.

The room tightened.

The older woman’s eyes moved to her.

“Do not speak his presence like that,” she said sharply.

The girl lowered her head quickly.

“Yes, I’m sorry.”

A pause.

Then the older woman continued, more controlled now.

“You are here because you were chosen. That means your movements, your words, even your silence will be watched.”

Another woman at the far side spoke quietly.

“And if we refuse?”

The room went still again.

The older woman looked at her for a long moment.

“Then you will be reminded why refusal is not a choice here.”

No one asked further.

Abena listened carefully, not to the warning, but to the structure beneath it.

Rules.

Reactions.

Consequences.

Everything here followed a pattern.

That was what mattered.

A guard appeared at the door.

“Prepare them.”

The women stood.

One by one, they were directed to wash, to adjust their cloths, to oil their skin lightly. Not for beauty, but for presentation. Even that had rules.

Abena stood near the basin as it was her turn.

She dipped her hands into the water.

It was cold.

She did not flinch.

Beside her, a girl whispered, “My hands are shaking.”

Abena did not look at her.

“Stop them,” she said simply.

“I cannot.”

“You can,” Abena replied. “They are yours.”

The girl looked at her briefly, then slowly steadied her breathing.

Abena continued washing her hands.

No more was said.

Time passed in measured steps.

Then the door opened again.

The guard returned.

“Line up.”

They obeyed.

The women formed a line, each adjusting their sack cloth, pulling it tighter at the waist, smoothing it down out of habit more than necessity.

Abena stood third from the front.

The door at the far end of the hall opened.

The king entered.

Everything in the room shifted without sound.

Abena noticed it again—the way bodies reacted before words, before thought. Shoulders straightened. Eyes lowered. Breath slowed.

Except hers.

She kept her gaze steady.

Not defiant.

Not submissive.

Simply present.

The king walked slowly along the line.

He did not rush.

He did not speak.

He looked.

One woman trembled slightly as he passed her.

He moved on.

Another lowered her head too quickly.

He paused there briefly.

Then continued.

When he reached Abena, he stopped.

The silence in the room deepened.

He looked at her for a long moment.

Not the same way as before.

This was closer now.

More deliberate.

Abena did not move.

Her sack cloth hung loosely from her shoulders, tied simply at the waist, the edges worn thin. A faint dust mark remained on her arm from earlier work, not yet washed away completely.

The king’s eyes traced her briefly.

Then he spoke.

“You were silent in the hall.”

Abena replied calmly, “I was not asked to speak.”

A faint shift moved through the room.

The guard near the door adjusted his stance.

The king did not react immediately.

Then he said, “You speak when others would not.”

Abena answered, “I speak when it is needed.”

A pause.

Longer this time.

Then the king gave a small nod.

“Come forward,” he said.

Abena stepped out of line.

Not hurried.

Not hesitant.

She stopped a few steps away from him.

He studied her again, then turned slightly to the others.

“Leave us.”

The room reacted immediately.

The women were guided out quickly, some glancing back once before disappearing through the door.

Only Abena remained.

The king turned back to her.

For a moment, neither spoke.

Then he said, “You do not behave like the others.”

Abena replied, “I am not the others.”

A faint stillness followed.

Then he asked, “What are you?”

Abena met his gaze directly.

“I am here,” she said.

Nothing more.

The king observed her for a long moment.

Then he spoke quietly.

“That is not an answer most give.”

Abena replied, “Most are not asked properly.”

A faint silence.

Then, unexpectedly, a small sound from him—not laughter, but something close to interest.

He turned slightly, walking a few steps away, then back again.

“You will remain in the inner quarters,” he said.

Abena nodded once.

There was no celebration in her response.

Only understanding.

He continued.

“You will be observed.”

Abena said, “I am already observed.”

A pause.

Then he looked at her again.

“Yes,” he said finally. “You are.”

The door opened.

A guard entered.

“Take her.”

Abena turned.

Before she left, the king’s voice came again.

“Abena.”

She stopped but did not turn fully.

“Yes.”

“Do not waste what I have seen.”

She replied without hesitation.

“I do not waste anything.”

Then she walked out.

Back into the corridor.

Back into the compound.

Back into the world that now watched her more closely than before.

But inside her, nothing shifted outwardly.

Only inwardly.

Because now she understood something clearly:

She was no longer invisible because she was ignored.

She was becoming unseen because she was being watched too closely.

And that was a different kind of danger entirely.

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